Anyone Good At English?, Need some help :S |
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Anyone Good At English?, Need some help :S |
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Jan 25 2009, 09:19 PM |
With my copy editor's hat on I can see more than 5 errors.
Some hints: incorrect use of indefinite and definite articles; punctuation prior to conjunctions; incorrect use of punctuation marks; improper use of the implied dative. As an academic I won't however tell you where all the issues are. Best of luck. Cheers, Tony -------------------- Get your music professionally mastered by anl AES registered Mastering Engineer. Contact me for Audio Mastering Services and Advice and visit our website www.miromastering.com
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Jan 25 2009, 09:54 PM |
As a help Niko
- incorrect use of definite and indefinite articles - use of 'a', 'an' and 'the'; in English one would not say 'the civilisation' in this example but 'Civilisation'. No article is required usually where we refer to the general rather than the specific in this example. This happens more than once in the piece. Also, as another help, the more common conjunctions are 'and' and 'but'. Whilst one may put a punctuation mark prior to, or following, 'and' you should not place one prior to 'but'. Any punctuation wrt 'and' needs to be used carefully. The implied dative case is 'to' - in the specific instance the implied dative is superfluous. Punctuation - use of the colon and the construction of the preceding and succeeding clauses are dubious... There are other issues as well. To some extent it depends on how pedantic one wishes to be as to how many errors there are. -------------------- Get your music professionally mastered by anl AES registered Mastering Engineer. Contact me for Audio Mastering Services and Advice and visit our website www.miromastering.com
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Jan 25 2009, 10:27 PM |
You can use either Niko although the expression used commonly in the UK would be 'a nature walk' rather than 'a walk in the nature'.
Cheers, Tony -------------------- Get your music professionally mastered by anl AES registered Mastering Engineer. Contact me for Audio Mastering Services and Advice and visit our website www.miromastering.com
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Jan 25 2009, 11:42 PM |
Damn, looks fine to me
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Jan 25 2009, 11:51 PM |
Haha!
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Jan 26 2009, 01:42 AM |
Damn, looks fine to me lol, after first reading had the same thought |
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