Organised Confusion - Aftermath Of War |
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Dec 3 2007, 07:02 PM
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A lot more to the point lyrics. I hate war with a passion and this songs sums up my feelings of War and the Aftermath of the lives it ruins. All these songs are written by me also. I hope these lyrics don't offend. It is just the strength of anger I feel to war and war crimes.
See, the cold blank eyes of the dead Smell the stench of the bodies decay A Crimson landscape remains You can still hear there screams Of repent Screams of suffering of Death Just terrified messages from beyond the grave A crazed dictator spreads his lies whilst the familes sorrow cements his power Another train to Auschwitz or a nuclear holocaust You can run Hide Away Lock your doors Sit and Pray But when the radio comes crackling in conveying words we hate to hear another civilian bloodbath propaganda spreading fear Hatred is reborn, in the aftermath of war Bombs rain down in the calm of night Lifeless forms Long to be reborn Hear, the screams echoing through the night Like a blanket of evil smothering your light But you know it wont go away The pain is here to stay Taking your freedom you took for granted in the past Why do we keep our faith in the leaders of the world when people are dying in illegal wars Blood on there hands yet still no apology in sight another explosion rocks the world yet no one accepts the blame Are you safe within your mind In your thoughts you leave behind But when the radio comes crackling in conveying words we hate to hear another civilian bloodbath propaganda spreading fear Hatred is reborn, in the aftermath of war Let them burn in hell For the chaos they create Let the evil in the world Be tortured by our hate Here is the song thread https://www.guitarmasterclass.net/guitar_fo...?showtopic=9151 © Paul Butcher 2007 This post has been edited by OrganisedConfusion: Dec 5 2007, 12:33 AM -------------------- Gear Guitars:- Caparison Horus Snowcloud, Parker Nitefly M, Parker Nitefly SA, Gibson SG, Parker P10e, 40 Year Old Spanish Acoustic Amps:- Framus Ruby Riot 2x12" stack |
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Dec 3 2007, 07:39 PM
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I like this one better than the last, I feel it flowed smoothly, it was easier to mull over, nicer structure.
Again, love the chorus, the crackling of the radio is a nice line, theres something symbolic about radios in relation with war, don't know if you've read The Horses by the poet Edwin Muir, but theres a similar type of subject matter in the first stanza that I feel is similar here. http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/the-horses/ Only bit I'm not sure of is this verse: QUOTE Hear, the screams echoing through the night Like a blanket of evil smothering your light But you know it wont go away The pain is here to stay Taking your freedom you took for granted in the past It feels a bit forced as you'd never introduced a strong rhyme scheme before this so the AABBC structure strikes as an oddity, not sure if you were running out of ideas here because it trails on slightly as if you were filling space and looking for ideas? That was my only qualm anyway, on the whole I thought it was excellent and I'm very interested in the subject matter so it relates well for me. The actual song itself is very good, I love the change in style from your vocalist and the guitar work is also pretty awesome. 
-------------------- Don't Panic.
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There is still some hope for me yet 
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Dec 4 2007, 11:59 PM
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Pretty good, and it gives off a unique atmosphere.
On the subject of rhyming, i find it hard to do intentionally, i just write and if it rhymes, i got lucky i guess
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